송영인 2019.06.13 13:31

Though your essay has many basis that support the opinion, I can't agree with your opinion because some of your basis have serious error. For example, you said about the health problem caused by game, but it can also caused by other reason. If someone have neck disk while he or she studying math, should we treat math as a disease? And we can't garantee that gamer's health problem are caused by only game. Studying or working in their office can also be additional reason. We shouldn't generalize it recklessly.
정다연 2019.06.14 22:57

송영인 : 1526 정다연 : I agree with you that neck disk can be caused by many another reasons. But the major factor of disease is watching small monitor in electronics in wrong posture. Also people can get another diseases except what I said. For example electronics have electromagnetic waves that can cause a lot of cancers. Playing game has more disadvantages in health than merits, so I think game addiction should be included in disease.
전하은 2019.06.15 15:59

[1525 전하은]I concur with you that game addiction can cause many health problems. Nevertheless, I consider your opinion inaccurate because of your second basis. You mentioned that game addiction has a bad effect on social relationship, but the rationale you proposed in your essay were a catholicization of bad effects which game addiction brings. In other words, you only wrote about disorder in social relationship is categorized as a disease, but you did not wrote about the proper reason why game addiction causes disable in social relationship. So we could not tell whether the game addiction causes aggression and disable in social relationship or not clearly. As the case stands, I cannot agree with you now .
정다연 2019.06.16 21:23

전하은 : 1526 정다연 : I can accept your idea but I can't agree with you. In a research, children who have early attach to electronics cannot get ego identity. Consequently, they have trouble controlling their desire and impulse. This is why children cannot adapt to social life such as school life. So, they would have lots of problems such as excessive fatigue, fallen grades, decreasing in hobbies, disobedience. Actually in statistical survey, schoolwork decreased 48.3% to addicted children. For this reason, I think game addiction causes social problems.
장혜원 2019.06.15 22:50

1821 장혜원) Your essay seems to have rational and logical supports. I absolutely agree with your point that game addiction could cause many problmes such as physical health, mental disorders, and discordance with society. I want to add to your arguement that game addiction causes not only eye dryness but also migraines due to intense concentration or eye strain.Also, the reason why game addiction cuase bad effects in one's social life is because if one engages in gaming too much, in other words, addicted to games, he/she will not try to spend any quality time with real life person. Rather, he/she will concentrate on virtual world and be isolated from reality.
정다연 2019.06.26 18:23

장혜원 : 1526 정다연 : Thank you for supporting my idea. I was interested that game addiction could also cause migraines and that people who are addicted could not have meaningful time with their family or friends. I can compensate my idea with your ideas.